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NaruHina: Maid-sama Chapter 5
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Chapter 5
A Love Rival?
Its been a month since then. The wounds have disappeared. " Hinata, come on! Its a
Saturday. We have the day off " Aiya shouted. I laughed and took off my uniform. " What
should I wear? " I said under my breath. I took a look at the clothes on my bed. "
Alright, I pick this one. " I mumbled and put it on. I walked out of the dorm. " Im ready!
" I said. I put on some sneakers, shorts, and a white tank. " Alright, lets go. I want to
go to this new cafe! " Haru said. " Oh yeah, I heard there were cute waiters too! "
Chizuko laughed. I snickered behind them. We arrived at the cafe. We walked in. The cafe
was packed with girls. " Good morning, ladies. May I help yo-- " the young man paused. His
eyes widened. Haru, Fuko, Aiya, and Chizuko stared at me. " What? " I asked. " Hinata...
Hyuuga? " he asked. " Y-Yes? " I mumbled. The young man laughed. " Oh my god! You dont
remember? Its me! Kaoru!! " He said. I slapped my mouth with shock. " Kaoru!! " I shouted.
I jumped on him and hugged him as he swung me around. " Its been such a long time! How
have you been? " Kaoru asked. I laughed. " Yeah it has. Great, Im actually a maid for the
Uzumaki Family. When did you come back from Britain? You still have a slight accent. " I
laughed. " Oh I just got back maybe a week ago. Wow, the Uzumaki Family. Thats a big step.
Lucky you! " Kaoru smiled. " Yeah, not really... " I mumbled. " Huh? " Kaoru looked
puzzled. " N-Nevermind! L-L-Lets sit! Come on girls... " I said nervously. Kaoru led us to
our table. He gave us the menus and left. Chizuko cleared her throat. " Sooo... whose
that? Looks like you guys are quite... close.. " Chizuko said. I laughed and blushed. " He
is a childhood friend... I was in love with him once, until he moved to Britain.. but
sadly he never had the courage to ask me out. So we were almost like never taking the next
step lovers. " I laughed awkwardly. " Well, I gotta say. You have good taste. He is BEYOND
hot! " Haru squealed. I laughed and stared at Kaoru. His red spiky hair, and gorgeous
green eyes. His rosy cheeks and joyous smile. I remember every detail. I really did love
him. I was so heartbroken when he left. I thought he would forget me, but it ended up that
I forgot him. I wonder if he still likes me? W-Wait what am I thinking. I love Naruto,
dont I? Gahh!! Torn between two... I cant pick!! Though, I feel safe and comfortable
around Kaoru. He always livens me up. Naruto needs me. I love that he is so protective of
me and he loves me in his own way, but not the love that I was thinking. If I'd pick
wisely. I'd probably pick.... " Here is your drinks! " Kaoru said, breaking my train of
thought. " T-Thanks Kao-kun. " I smiled. " Your welcome, Hina-chan " Kaoru smiled. I
laughed. He hasnt called me that in years. " Hina-chan? Kao-kun? You even have cute
nicknames? " Aiya asked. I nodded and blushed. " Oh my fricken god. You guys are meant for
eachother! " Fuko shouted. Everyone stared. I hid under my arms. " Please be a little more
quiet. " I mumbled. Chizuko hit Fuko's head. " Baka... " she said. " I dont even know if
he still likes me... " I frowned. " Lets invite him to the mansion. I dont think Naruto
would mind, right? " Haru said. I nodded. " Sure I guess.. " I mumbled. " Hold on theres
some hot waiters over there. Let me get some of that... " Chizuko said seductively and bit
her lip. I forcefully grabbed her shirt and pulled her in the chair. " No... Chizuko " I
said. Chizuko pouted. " At least let me have some fun.... " She mumbled. After we ate,
Kaoru came with the bill. " Thank you. Have a nice day. " Kaoru said. I got up. " Kaoru-
kun. When do you get off work? " I asked confidently. " Uh, now actually. Why? " He asked.
I swallowed hard and took a breath. " Would you like to... hang out with me... at the
mansion? " I asked. Kaoru gave me a huge smile. " Of course! Let me get my stuff. Wait for
me okay? " He said and ran off. I smiled. He was always so energetic. I went outside and
waited. " Sorry I took so long " Kaoru opened the door and went outside. " Its okay " I
smiled. " Wow... a limousine? " Kaoru said. I nodded. We went in and the driver drove off.
" Wheres your friends? " Kaoru asked. " Oh they stayed behind. They wanted to have more
fun " I said. Meanwhile, " Hey, you! Make out with me! " Chizuko shouted and forced a kiss
on one of the cute waiters. Kaoru and I saw Chizuko being pulled out of the cafe for
kissing the waiter. " Buzz off! Girls dont touch him!! He is mine!! " She shouted. Kaoru
laughed. " Energetic and stubborn, huh? " Kaoru said. " Yeah.. " I mumbled. That laugh.
I've missed it. We arrived at the mansion. " Come on Kao-kun. " I said and grabbed his
arm. " Welcome back, Hinata. " Itachi said. I smiled. " Who might this be? " He asked. "
My childhood friend. " I smiled. Kaoru waved and smiled. As I was about to walk out in the
garden with Kaoru, Naruto saw us. " Oh Hinata. Could you do me a favo- " Naruto paused and
stared at Kaoru. " Whose that? " He asked. " My childhood friend, Kaoru. Kaoru, meet
Naruto Uzumaki. He is the heir of the Uzumaki Family. I work for him. " I said. Kaoru held
out his hand. " Nice to meet you. A friend of Hina-chan's is a friend of mine. " Kaoru
smiled. He is so adorable!! I blushed. Naruto glared at Kaoru's hand. He shook it. "
Yeah.. " He mumbled and walked away. Kaoru looked puzzled. " Is he in a bad mood? " He
asked. " Nahh, He is always like that " I giggled. I took Kaoru outside in the garden. "
Wow, its beautiful! " He said. For a second, I stared at the guy who was once everything I
ever wanted in a man. I hate to say it, but... he still is that guy. I want to be with
him. I think I... still love him.. The wind picked up. Kaoru faced me. He smiled at me.
His red hair swayed in the wind. His green eyes were focused on me. " I came back for
you... " Kaoru said. My eyes widened. " Huh? " I said shocked. " I love you... will you go
out with me. " Kaoru asked. I smiled. I've never been so happy before in my life. I've
been waiting for those words ever since I laid my eyes on him. " Yes!! Yes!! " I shouted.
I hugged him tightly and kissed him. " Master, are you okay with this? " Itachi asked.
Naruto stared at Hinata and Kaoru. " I could care less. I have Sakura anyway.I dont need
Hinata. Its not like I love her. Screw her. " Naruto said and walked away without another
word. Itachi sighed. " Master, when are you going to realize that you love the girl. Get
yourself together dammit. Go back to the man you were before your parents put the burden
of this family on your shoulders. " Itachi said under his breath. Its been a week since
Kaoru and I started dating. Naruto hasnt been the same since then. I wonder why. He
ignores me when I ask for permission to see Kaoru. He has been seeing alot of Sakura
lately. I dont blame him or anything, she IS his fiance. Its just he always ignores her.
I find it weird... To be honest.... it bothers me. " Hinata! Your spacing out. Whats
wrong? " Kaoru asked. I squeezed his hand as we walked across the street. " Hinata? " He
asked. I dont know why but, I feel depressed. I looked up. My eyes widened. " Wh-What... "
I mumbled. In the fancy cafe was Naruto and Sakura. " What are they... " I mumbled. The
light went green and the cars drove by. I was focused on Naruto. " Naruto-kun!! " I
screamed and ran into the street without thinking. " Hinata!! Look out!! " Kaoru shouted.
The car was coming fast i was still running i looked to my left. It was right there. I
closed my eyes. " Hinata!! " a voice shouted. I was pushed to the ground. Tears fell on my
hands. " I-I was so scared... t-than-- " I looked up. " N-Naruto " I mumbled. " What the
hell, Hinata. Dont scare your boyfriend like that. " He said. I frowned and looked down. "
ahh, yeah.... " I mumbled. Kaoru picked me up. Everyone stared at us. I raised my hand to
tell the crowd I was okay. They walked away in relief. What was that? I was completely
focused on Naruto, I forgot everything around me. Whats wrong with me! I love Kaoru dont
I! Why am I so jealous!! .... J-Jealous... Im not jealous... I REFUSE to believe Im still
in love with Naruto!! I refuse!! I went back to the mansion, said goodbye to Kaoru and
cried myself to sleep. I dont know what to do anymore....
TO BE CONTINUED.........
A Love Rival?
Its been a month since then. The wounds have disappeared. " Hinata, come on! Its a
Saturday. We have the day off " Aiya shouted. I laughed and took off my uniform. " What
should I wear? " I said under my breath. I took a look at the clothes on my bed. "
Alright, I pick this one. " I mumbled and put it on. I walked out of the dorm. " Im ready!
" I said. I put on some sneakers, shorts, and a white tank. " Alright, lets go. I want to
go to this new cafe! " Haru said. " Oh yeah, I heard there were cute waiters too! "
Chizuko laughed. I snickered behind them. We arrived at the cafe. We walked in. The cafe
was packed with girls. " Good morning, ladies. May I help yo-- " the young man paused. His
eyes widened. Haru, Fuko, Aiya, and Chizuko stared at me. " What? " I asked. " Hinata...
Hyuuga? " he asked. " Y-Yes? " I mumbled. The young man laughed. " Oh my god! You dont
remember? Its me! Kaoru!! " He said. I slapped my mouth with shock. " Kaoru!! " I shouted.
I jumped on him and hugged him as he swung me around. " Its been such a long time! How
have you been? " Kaoru asked. I laughed. " Yeah it has. Great, Im actually a maid for the
Uzumaki Family. When did you come back from Britain? You still have a slight accent. " I
laughed. " Oh I just got back maybe a week ago. Wow, the Uzumaki Family. Thats a big step.
Lucky you! " Kaoru smiled. " Yeah, not really... " I mumbled. " Huh? " Kaoru looked
puzzled. " N-Nevermind! L-L-Lets sit! Come on girls... " I said nervously. Kaoru led us to
our table. He gave us the menus and left. Chizuko cleared her throat. " Sooo... whose
that? Looks like you guys are quite... close.. " Chizuko said. I laughed and blushed. " He
is a childhood friend... I was in love with him once, until he moved to Britain.. but
sadly he never had the courage to ask me out. So we were almost like never taking the next
step lovers. " I laughed awkwardly. " Well, I gotta say. You have good taste. He is BEYOND
hot! " Haru squealed. I laughed and stared at Kaoru. His red spiky hair, and gorgeous
green eyes. His rosy cheeks and joyous smile. I remember every detail. I really did love
him. I was so heartbroken when he left. I thought he would forget me, but it ended up that
I forgot him. I wonder if he still likes me? W-Wait what am I thinking. I love Naruto,
dont I? Gahh!! Torn between two... I cant pick!! Though, I feel safe and comfortable
around Kaoru. He always livens me up. Naruto needs me. I love that he is so protective of
me and he loves me in his own way, but not the love that I was thinking. If I'd pick
wisely. I'd probably pick.... " Here is your drinks! " Kaoru said, breaking my train of
thought. " T-Thanks Kao-kun. " I smiled. " Your welcome, Hina-chan " Kaoru smiled. I
laughed. He hasnt called me that in years. " Hina-chan? Kao-kun? You even have cute
nicknames? " Aiya asked. I nodded and blushed. " Oh my fricken god. You guys are meant for
eachother! " Fuko shouted. Everyone stared. I hid under my arms. " Please be a little more
quiet. " I mumbled. Chizuko hit Fuko's head. " Baka... " she said. " I dont even know if
he still likes me... " I frowned. " Lets invite him to the mansion. I dont think Naruto
would mind, right? " Haru said. I nodded. " Sure I guess.. " I mumbled. " Hold on theres
some hot waiters over there. Let me get some of that... " Chizuko said seductively and bit
her lip. I forcefully grabbed her shirt and pulled her in the chair. " No... Chizuko " I
said. Chizuko pouted. " At least let me have some fun.... " She mumbled. After we ate,
Kaoru came with the bill. " Thank you. Have a nice day. " Kaoru said. I got up. " Kaoru-
kun. When do you get off work? " I asked confidently. " Uh, now actually. Why? " He asked.
I swallowed hard and took a breath. " Would you like to... hang out with me... at the
mansion? " I asked. Kaoru gave me a huge smile. " Of course! Let me get my stuff. Wait for
me okay? " He said and ran off. I smiled. He was always so energetic. I went outside and
waited. " Sorry I took so long " Kaoru opened the door and went outside. " Its okay " I
smiled. " Wow... a limousine? " Kaoru said. I nodded. We went in and the driver drove off.
" Wheres your friends? " Kaoru asked. " Oh they stayed behind. They wanted to have more
fun " I said. Meanwhile, " Hey, you! Make out with me! " Chizuko shouted and forced a kiss
on one of the cute waiters. Kaoru and I saw Chizuko being pulled out of the cafe for
kissing the waiter. " Buzz off! Girls dont touch him!! He is mine!! " She shouted. Kaoru
laughed. " Energetic and stubborn, huh? " Kaoru said. " Yeah.. " I mumbled. That laugh.
I've missed it. We arrived at the mansion. " Come on Kao-kun. " I said and grabbed his
arm. " Welcome back, Hinata. " Itachi said. I smiled. " Who might this be? " He asked. "
My childhood friend. " I smiled. Kaoru waved and smiled. As I was about to walk out in the
garden with Kaoru, Naruto saw us. " Oh Hinata. Could you do me a favo- " Naruto paused and
stared at Kaoru. " Whose that? " He asked. " My childhood friend, Kaoru. Kaoru, meet
Naruto Uzumaki. He is the heir of the Uzumaki Family. I work for him. " I said. Kaoru held
out his hand. " Nice to meet you. A friend of Hina-chan's is a friend of mine. " Kaoru
smiled. He is so adorable!! I blushed. Naruto glared at Kaoru's hand. He shook it. "
Yeah.. " He mumbled and walked away. Kaoru looked puzzled. " Is he in a bad mood? " He
asked. " Nahh, He is always like that " I giggled. I took Kaoru outside in the garden. "
Wow, its beautiful! " He said. For a second, I stared at the guy who was once everything I
ever wanted in a man. I hate to say it, but... he still is that guy. I want to be with
him. I think I... still love him.. The wind picked up. Kaoru faced me. He smiled at me.
His red hair swayed in the wind. His green eyes were focused on me. " I came back for
you... " Kaoru said. My eyes widened. " Huh? " I said shocked. " I love you... will you go
out with me. " Kaoru asked. I smiled. I've never been so happy before in my life. I've
been waiting for those words ever since I laid my eyes on him. " Yes!! Yes!! " I shouted.
I hugged him tightly and kissed him. " Master, are you okay with this? " Itachi asked.
Naruto stared at Hinata and Kaoru. " I could care less. I have Sakura anyway.I dont need
Hinata. Its not like I love her. Screw her. " Naruto said and walked away without another
word. Itachi sighed. " Master, when are you going to realize that you love the girl. Get
yourself together dammit. Go back to the man you were before your parents put the burden
of this family on your shoulders. " Itachi said under his breath. Its been a week since
Kaoru and I started dating. Naruto hasnt been the same since then. I wonder why. He
ignores me when I ask for permission to see Kaoru. He has been seeing alot of Sakura
lately. I dont blame him or anything, she IS his fiance. Its just he always ignores her.
I find it weird... To be honest.... it bothers me. " Hinata! Your spacing out. Whats
wrong? " Kaoru asked. I squeezed his hand as we walked across the street. " Hinata? " He
asked. I dont know why but, I feel depressed. I looked up. My eyes widened. " Wh-What... "
I mumbled. In the fancy cafe was Naruto and Sakura. " What are they... " I mumbled. The
light went green and the cars drove by. I was focused on Naruto. " Naruto-kun!! " I
screamed and ran into the street without thinking. " Hinata!! Look out!! " Kaoru shouted.
The car was coming fast i was still running i looked to my left. It was right there. I
closed my eyes. " Hinata!! " a voice shouted. I was pushed to the ground. Tears fell on my
hands. " I-I was so scared... t-than-- " I looked up. " N-Naruto " I mumbled. " What the
hell, Hinata. Dont scare your boyfriend like that. " He said. I frowned and looked down. "
ahh, yeah.... " I mumbled. Kaoru picked me up. Everyone stared at us. I raised my hand to
tell the crowd I was okay. They walked away in relief. What was that? I was completely
focused on Naruto, I forgot everything around me. Whats wrong with me! I love Kaoru dont
I! Why am I so jealous!! .... J-Jealous... Im not jealous... I REFUSE to believe Im still
in love with Naruto!! I refuse!! I went back to the mansion, said goodbye to Kaoru and
cried myself to sleep. I dont know what to do anymore....
TO BE CONTINUED.........
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I guess, I'm not used to some of this things. She is acting like nothing happened to her. ?? How can she not be upset at what happened to her or have some psychological scars and/or be pissed at Naruto? Now she's all lovy dovy? Sorry. I still think that chapter was over the top. I guess she fell in love with him at first sight. But it's one thing to be in love with him, but to be his submissive(accept being raped/tortured) when he hasn't even touched her? It's stretching things way too much. I guess that it was just like a mosquito bite for her, oops, it's gone now. No side effects(not in real life)
If I might I think Chapter. 4 should occur further into the story once they are more involved(even if they deny or triangles or whatever, but once they had sex) or change the time of punishment to 2 days or 1 week(so the effects are less lasting and more believable that she forgave him) or not happen at all(meaning the rape, he could have tortured her and abuse her boobs[partial rape]without penetration[or oral sex for degradation].It would make more sense if the OC is a little afraid of Naruto & doesn't break his word all the way]. Now everybody is acting like teenagers in love without a care in the world. I know this is an earlier work but if you are going to have mature themes, shouldn't it be treated maturely? What was the point of having her raped/tortured? So he could have her call him Naruto-kun? Wouldn't just torturing have the same effect? He could have been protective(if you want to call it that, since she was put in that situation by him, if he had saved her at last minute, to check he was keeping hi sword. +And I'm going to assume that she didn't leave because there is a clause in the contract that would hurt her family. Because otherwise it makes no sense that she stayed for that for 2 months of rape, while loving her old master).
Otherwise a rival is good. She needs someone to show her what real love is, show her to love herself & treat her right. I'm still thinking her mind is broken/repressing from that experience. I hope he is very good to her. I usually hate OC, but yours are managed well.
If I might I think Chapter. 4 should occur further into the story once they are more involved(even if they deny or triangles or whatever, but once they had sex) or change the time of punishment to 2 days or 1 week(so the effects are less lasting and more believable that she forgave him) or not happen at all(meaning the rape, he could have tortured her and abuse her boobs[partial rape]without penetration[or oral sex for degradation].It would make more sense if the OC is a little afraid of Naruto & doesn't break his word all the way]. Now everybody is acting like teenagers in love without a care in the world. I know this is an earlier work but if you are going to have mature themes, shouldn't it be treated maturely? What was the point of having her raped/tortured? So he could have her call him Naruto-kun? Wouldn't just torturing have the same effect? He could have been protective(if you want to call it that, since she was put in that situation by him, if he had saved her at last minute, to check he was keeping hi sword. +And I'm going to assume that she didn't leave because there is a clause in the contract that would hurt her family. Because otherwise it makes no sense that she stayed for that for 2 months of rape, while loving her old master).
Otherwise a rival is good. She needs someone to show her what real love is, show her to love herself & treat her right. I'm still thinking her mind is broken/repressing from that experience. I hope he is very good to her. I usually hate OC, but yours are managed well.